emodub(KO) vs. Magnif(L)

[emodub]

3 bars of textual explosuions...

oofcourse u must include a vote link..

so do that with your check ...

due 24 hours max

kthanksbye <3

[emodub]

check

http://bodybagsent.net/forums/showth...2119#post42119

[Magnif]

Look you emo fuck I eat emcee's for lunch and wash'em down with greatness//
So brainless your ears touch... the s p a c e between your ears is spaceless//
I kill quik with the flick of a wrist bitch no time to make a bucket list shit I resist L's like tefflon//
stay head strong...you could rap to insomniacs n still get slept on//
So get your fucking death on..before you shit a written//
You can't cope i just know emo give up hope like a suicide victom//

[Magnif]

Who needs 24 hours to write a verse

[emodub]

take this easy'.all ya words lacked funds'..so why u WRITE THESE UP?
son i easily ..'burn mag numb'...like i blew up an ICE CREAM TRUCK..
magnum ice creams..
putcha to rest.ima make him BREAK UP BADLY..rip his FACE,GUTS AND TEETH..
leave you knocked out..after this not even rod stewart could WAKE UP MAGGY..
song lyrics..wake up maggy
ths CHUMP IS WACK..'thinks hes deep with vowells'.so CONSTRUCTS A RAP..
geek?virgin..not even 'springfield pedophiles'..would FUCK WIT MAGS....
maggyyyy simpson..


oh yeh and...

http://bodybagsent.net/forums/showth...2119#post42119

is his voting link^^ he voted there..since he dumb and didnt post it.

[Korchar]

Mag
Look you emo fuck I eat emcee's for lunch and wash'em down with greatness//
So brainless your ears touch... the s p a c e between your ears is spaceless//
-not liking the self-glory in the first line, it's a battle -- diss the other dude
-relate ur bar, don't just switch random topics... that shit's easy n wack
-creative way of saying he's dumb, I'll give u that... but it ain't creative like wordplay n shit, don't do this unless u know what u doing

I kill quik with the flick of a wrist bitch no time to make a bucket list shit I resist L's like tefflon//
stay head strong...you could rap to insomniacs n still get slept on//
-I heard the insomniacs/slept on thing too many times for it to be dope
-no transition between the bar n the punch, it's like "random unrelated shit" then "punch"
+good flow in line 1 tho

So get your fucking death on..before you shit a written//
You can't cope i just know emo give up hope like a suicide victom//
-your best bar in the battle, but it's meh still


Overall
Not liking how you ain't got personals, I mean u battling a dude specificially.. so diss him specifically. Could definately work on your multies, throw some punches in ur setups as well... bad transitions in your bars too, it's just random multies n then a punch :\. Get rid of the self-glory as well, it's boring filler.

Emo
take this easy'.all ya words lacked funds'..so why u WRITE THESE UP?
son i easily ..'burn mag numb'...like i blew up an ICE CREAM TRUCK..
-setup doesn't relate
-no crazy multi scheme
-no personal
-not really lovin' the fact that it's some obscure reference
-no setup punch

putcha to rest.ima make him BREAK UP BADLY..rip his FACE,GUTS AND TEETH..
leave you knocked out..after this not even rod stewart could WAKE UP MAGGY..
+better setup here
-everything else about the first bar is still the same
-also, badly/and teeth << really?

ths CHUMP IS WACK..'thinks hes deep with vowells'.so CONSTRUCTS A RAP..
geek?virgin..not even 'springfield pedophiles'..would FUCK WIT MAGS....
-you not even dissing him, you're saying people wouldn't fuck w/ him.. that's a good thing
-everything that's true in the first bar is true here (except the obscure reference)

Overall
Everything in the first bar, change motherfucker... I've said the same shit at you like 50 times; "random setup" + "some kinda nameplay".. first of all, that style's just not good, second of all if you repeat that pattern 80x it gets predictable and boring.

Punches: Emo, cuz mag fillered his shit with self glory
Personals: Neither
Multies: Emo, longer strands of multis n shit and more related
Wordplay: Mag, obv.
Nameplay: Emo, obv.
Flow: Mag, the in-rhymes helped a lot.. he mostly took this cuz of bar #2
Originality/creativity/enjoyment: Mag
Vote: Emo very, very, very, very slightly edges it.. barely at all. There weren't really catas where 1 dude avalanched the other, except nameplay for emo... but mag countered that with wordplay. What really just tipped the scale for me was mag's self-glory filler and emo's punches n multies were slightly better than mag's flow n creativity.

[Magnif]

Just wondering how you expect me to be able to use personals when I hadn't even been at the site for 2 minutes at the time this was posted

[Lyrs]

^ :: Stop. Fucking. Swaying. Faggot.::

-Deuce-

[Korchar]

the same way I expect dub to use personals on you when you've been on the site for 2 minutes, and the same way I used personals on you in our battle when you've been on the site for 2 minutes?

[Magnif]

I'm not swaying....I'm just saying...and it don't matter no one votes anyway